So I feel bad. I haven’t updated the site with a good article in a hot minute! I have another ‘For the Love of’ article I’m working on, but it’s not quite done yet. I am writing plenty though friends, and just to prove I thought I might treat you guys to something I’ve never done before. I’m posting the most recent short store script I wrote! It’s for another 8 page ashcan called The Wanted Man. The title of the ashcan’s story is ‘The Squid”. It’s set in a Pulp Comic type atmosphere with a Noir feel to it. Check it out below and PLEASE feel free and encouraged to leave criticisms and comments below! I have thick skin and love learning from mistakes, so let em rip! Hopefully this is something cool to make up for not posting in a bit 😉 ENJOY!
Monday September 10th, 2012
The Wanted Man Ashcan
Panel 1: We see a warehouse from an aerial view. Looking downward at the complex, we can see through the skylight that lights are on. Maybe even we can see a few men standing around in a circle underneath the skylight.
Caption 1: Inside a closed warehouse in the Industrial District.
Panel 2: Now inside the warehouse, we see a gathering of underworld men. Twelve men stand around, some leaning on crates, some looking around in paranoia, others tending to business. One lone man sits at a desk, writing information down in a book.
Tony: LOOK. I am Tony Ferro. I WROTE the book on how to run an outfit! You don’t do it by cutting territory from the guys that are successful Bobby!
Bobby: I understand your frustration Tony. This is what Shade says though. You know that means I don’t have a choice, and quite frankly, neither do you.
Henchman 1: Hey, any of you guys getting that vibe?
Henchman 2: I did just get a chill…
Panel 1: A man in a trench coat stands, mostly disguised by the shadows, at the doorway.
Shadowed Man: I’m not part of this, but I would have to agree with Tony on this one.
Tony: Hey, hit the road Jack, this is a private meeting!
Bobby: Who the hell are you?
Panel 2: A close up as the man’s face is revealed by the light. His face is still hidden however, as a black paint surrounds hihs eyes like a domino mask, but with several finger smudges that resemble a Squid’s tentacles.
The Squid: Not ‘Jack’.
Panel 3: The two spooked henchman recognize ‘Jack’ for who he really is.
Henchman 1: Oh no… That’s him…
Henchman 2: The SQUID!
Page 3: (Panels 1-3 are smaller and lined up at the top of the page accenting panel 4 as the main focus of the page)
Panel 1: Close up on a gun being pulled from a holster under one of the men’s jacket.
Panel 2: Close up as one of the men brandishes a knife.
Panel 3: Close up as brass knuckles slide onto the fingers of one of the men.
Panel 4: The Squid stands surrounded by ten men, all threatening with a weapon of some sorts.
Bobby: I heard, they called you the Squid because you could take ten men in a fight, almost like you had ten arms. Now, I don’t see no extra arms, but let’s put the rumor to the test…
Page 4: (Panel scheme mirror’s previous page)
Panel 1: Close up as the gun comes out of the henchman’s hand, seemingly pulled into the thin air.
Panel 2: Close up as the same thing happens to the knife.
Panel 3: Close up as the same thing happens to the brass knuckles.
Panel 4: The Squid stands in the middle of the men with their weapons levitating in the air in front of them, pointed in their faces in a threatening manner.
Bobby: How in the Hell!?!?!
Squid: Rumors aren’t always lies Bobby. Now we could do this the easy way…
Panel 1: Close up as the hammer cocks back on one of the guns. The man in front of it cringes in fear.
Squid: I could just pop you all right now and be done with it.
Panel 2: The guns levitate away from the men and in towards the Squid.
Squid: But I guess it’s your luck day fellas…
Panel 3: The Squid puts the guns in the pockets of his trench coat.
Squid: I feel like I need to stretch my arms though, so let’s to this the hard way.
Panel 4: Putting up his fists like a boxer, the Squid prepares to take them all on at once.
Squid: Let’s go.
Panel 5: With a right jab, the Squid begins to engage on of the henchmen. Behind him we see the others preparing to rush him.
Panel 1: Two of the men charging from behind are stopped as their knives point at their throats, stopping them in their tracks.
Panel 2: One of the men is knocked out by the brass knuckles, which seem to have a mind of their own.
Panel 3: The Squid knocks out one of the men with a right cross.
Panel 4: One of the henchmen grabs the Squid from behind in a bear hug.
Panel 5: Bobby gets involved and takes a swing, connecting with the Squid’s face.
Panel 6: The Squid kicks Bobby painfully in between the legs.
Panel 7: The man holding the Squid is stabbed in the leg by one of the knives.
Panel 8: Tony runs towards the Squid with a crowbar in hand.
Tony: You Bastard!
Panel 1: The Squid stands unflinching in front of Tony as the crobat stops in his hand, frozen in place.
Tony: What the!?!
Panel 2: The Squid uppercuts Tony, knocking him out.
Panel 3: Standing in the middle of the warehouse, the Squid looks at then men all lying on the ground either in agony or out cold.
Panel 4: The man with the ledger tries to sneaks behind some crates.
Panel 5: He stops cold as the Squid stands in front of him with his hand out.
Squid: The ledger. Please.
Panel 6: The police raid the warehouse, pouring in through the doors, and expecting heavy resisstance.
Panel 7: All they find is the Squid’s left overs, the men still lying on the ground in pain or unconscious. The ledger is taped to Bobby’s limp body. A piece of paper is pinned to his shirt with a crudely drawn squid on it.
Panel 8: The Squid stands on a rooftop across the street, watching as the police pull in their catch.
Squid: You know, you’re not a bad person. I don’t know why you insisst on creating that image for yourself.
Panel 1: Facing the Squid, we see over his shoulder as a woman in black and purple stands behind him.
Woman: I don’t know what you mean. I have a deep love for greed. It’s almost an insatiable. I’ll do what ever necessary to get what I want Mr. Squid.
Panel 2: She pulls a gun to the back of his head, as the Squid stands un-phased.
Woman: Even kill. As I understand it, you yourself are a wanted man. That’s a reward I wouldn’t mind claiming.
Squid: HA! The Shade turning the Squid in to the police for a reward! That I’d like to see!
Shade: But you wouldn’t see anything with a bullet in yout head would you?.
Panel 3: Two guns levitate to either side of the Shade’s head.
Squid: No, but then I don’t suppose you could pull a trigger with two bullets in your head could you?
Panel 4: The Shade fades away into invisibility through a purple and black fog.
Shade: Touché hero…
Panel 5: The Squid looks out on an empty rooftop with the moon lighting the sky and speckled city lights in the background.
Squid: Good night my love…
These are the general page outlines I did at first to help figure out the books flow:
1-Mob gathered to discuss territory boundaries and collect dues, that are put into their ledger
2-The Squid walks in calmly
3-The men pull guns, knives, brass knucks and threaten him
4-Their weapons are pulled from their hands and pointed back at them, doesn’t like guns. discards
5-using only the brass knucks and knives, he non lethally attacks the men
6-Squid stands victorious and the cops show up
7-The ledger goes to the cops and the Squidescapes to the rooftop where he watches the cops arrest the men. He talks to a stranger
8-The Shade reveals herself to Squid as they exchange a flirtatious and nemsistic dialogue ending the ashcan
Hope you guys thought this was awesome and it inspires you, and always remember the world is ours to make!